Easter Egg Hunts
The door is open
We are off and running
My eyes are wandering
Looking for colorful eggs filled with delicious candy
Creamy chocolate
Fruity jelly beans
Crunchy,carmley twix
Hidden Everywhere
Kids pushing each other out of the way
Baskets filled with candy
Laughing
Smiling
Running
Having the time of your life
Easter Egg Hunts
My inspiration came from the fun family time I have had on Easter Sunday. Running around searching for eggs. This has become a family tradition. We do this every year. It’s a fun way to get the whole family together. We always let the little kids go first. Then after that we count all our eggs to see who has the most. I love doing it and my favorite part is eating the candy afterwards.
In this poem I used some repetition and some description and detail. I wrote about this because I love Easter and all the candy and getting together with family.
Nina
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You did use repetition and detail in your description and I think that was a real strength of your writing.
I was really impressed by your poetry and use of language and think that you did.
Mr Webb, Auroa Primary School, Taranaki, New Zealand
mrwebbauroa.blogspot.com
Thank you so much for the very nice comment and you are very welcome for commenting on her blog her work is very good and I enjoyed reading it.